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Old 01-09-2006, 04:05 PM   #31
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you motherless....... how come our D&D campains arnt this f******* awesome
dude ur campaigns are great but this is a whole new level.
Man youv'e got captivation shining out your ass.
there still the usual number of spelling mistakes for your work heavens i proofed enough of it.
Wraawr write more xD im not reading any other books because i dont want tem to interfere with this story.... and i normally read 3 at a time.
keep writing and errr how long is it gonna be roughly, or is this gonna be an on going thing up to today with all the new happenings. and errm T can ya help me with that sig i mentioned :P
its boring not having one.
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Old 01-09-2006, 08:38 PM   #32
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Uh how about you read the frelling ooks I blew my money on and got you for Christmas?
Hmmm I should DM again some time and do more description for battles, uh story length... well this is nothing so far I mean I have loads planned its ment to span out for a while year... I guess it depends how long I can write it for or if I get tierd of Ragnarok.

Sig uh... I'll ask you on team speak right now
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Old 01-10-2006, 04:02 PM   #33
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*while the battle rages on inside the castle rahab is STILL trying to stop getting shot by the guards ^^* your doin well there, in fact i think i did a sketch for that castle entrance scene. or was it something else, well keep writing and the trout will stay in the fridge ^^
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Old 01-24-2006, 08:03 AM   #34
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I hope to have some of this updated agian soon, sorry for slacking off but I have spent most my time I would normaly write on Teamspeak messing around with FE & BR members, or powerleveling guild members. I will try and get some free time to write a whole load more to this as I still have loads of great ideas and loads of players to write in, so keep checking and maybe somewhen soon I'll have an update for you.
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Old 01-28-2006, 03:41 AM   #35
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Aah... at last I had time to read this.

Hmmh, feedback time. I love how you turelus show the reader the situation from the both sides. Are you going to use current alive guilds on dro, or does the dead guilds still apply to your story? Mainly meaning if you can add some spice from what example Fury the Bloodrose leader is doing, Soulreaver so on...

But. Youīve added VP and Pandas as outside guilds and that's very good. And I love the charachter decriptions.. when you do those in depth, that is. Side chars like Cyan / Eloron / Storm.. their char decription were kinda plain. The big fight scene was overally good, bit messy though, was hard to keep on track what was happening... and suddendly such big fight fight got happening was weird. I was expecting minor skirmishes

Maybe we could do this kind of stuff in dro too? I mean this inspired atleast me to roleplay more at Dro.

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"I want your help in bringing that asshole Zero and his damn guild crashing down”
.. asshole is so rounded insult, i was expecting more like.. that pompous irresponsible idiot etc... but itīs all good haha ~

You can freely write whatever you like about VP and itīs members, as long it within good taste, i hope other guilds go with this too and wonīt take stuff offending in this story ~

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Old 01-28-2006, 05:26 AM   #36
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BTW Cid pointed this out to me, STORM IS A GUY there are bits where I referd to him as female but he is ment to be male in this story sorry for the mistakes
It really depends on the time damn i make the story so complex^^
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Old 01-28-2006, 12:51 PM   #37
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I felt that battle was very sloppy to be honest I really want to mess aorund with it and spice it up as you can tell I'm pretty bad at writing combat in stories, hmm as for insulting you I didn't want to offend you really I would rather keep it tastefull as well but I'm sure I could spice it up a little for you hmmm as for how guilds are now I'm not sure who will be added in the story has changed from its draft quite a lot I'm still trying to decide how I want cyan in it, but yeah maybe some of the other guild will be added in I'll have to readmy draft and see where they can fit.

Stormjust say if you wnat to be a guy or a gal I dont mind I will write you any way you like (apart from you HAVe to be a monk)

I have started some of the next update slowling writeinga couple of new friends in as well.
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Old 01-28-2006, 06:37 PM   #38
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hmm as for insulting you I didn't want to offend you really I would rather keep it tastefull as well but I'm sure I could spice it up a little for you
You can do better brit boy! haha, kidding

But was kinda negative sounding reply from me before, I would like to correct that one. Your style of writing was atleast for me very entertaining and i couldnīt stop reading...

...so thumbs up ~

I still got.. eloīs, cidīs and rahabs stuff to read :h

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Old 01-29-2006, 01:20 PM   #39
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But was kinda negative sounding reply from me before, I would like to correct that one. Your style of writing was atleast for me very entertaining and i couldnīt stop reading...
I don't mind negative feedback I like people who have the guts to stand up as say "hey this bit here sucks" more than some one who thinks that but will just say "Yeah awesome loved every bit of it" so if any one thinks part of my story stinks let me know why I'm an amature writer so I need to learn from others opinions.

And why do you want me to insult you so much? Have I not said enough to you in the past? hell we all know how unplesent I have been to you
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Old 01-29-2006, 01:52 PM   #40
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I think the ending part of your last post was a bit meh with the whole "screaming out in pain".
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Old 01-29-2006, 11:27 PM   #41
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And why do you want me to insult you so much? Have I not said enough to you in the past? hell we all know how unplesent I have been to you
Itīs all good haha

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Old 02-27-2006, 02:32 PM   #42
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I decided not to work on this any more after some personal issues with some of the people involved, it sounds stupid but trust me its for the best. sorry not every one got a chance to be in it as far as it got.
Also sorry about th mushy ending the person involved forced me to post it or be smacked with a harp

I'll be working on a D&D based fanfic soon about a Tiefling and his lfe after he escaped the opression of the Red Wizards and Thay. hopefully that will be as intersting to you all as this one.
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Old 02-27-2006, 07:22 PM   #43
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mmmm wizards of Thay *drools*
teifling hey... i may know summit of this story before it begins
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Old 02-28-2006, 10:15 PM   #44
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This makes me a sad panda .
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